The Greens of Jericho

Reviewer: Marzee Doats Signed [Report This]
Date: 17 Jun 2009 9:37:45 AM Title: Last One Standing

Nice job, Penny!  I know that this was a tough one for you (but remember -- Emily/Mimi would have been the hardest E/M pairing to write).  You did an absolutely lovely job.  This is a great friendship fic, excellently executed. 

I can totally see Mimi wondering what the heck it is about Eric that attracts Mary.  She definitely didn't expect that relationship to ever work out and seemed to enjoy badmouthing Eric during those first few days in Jericho.  It's good that she now sees at least some of his skills (crowd control, anti-smoking crusader, attorney) as useful.  I'm glad that they both came out of their experience with a better understanding of one another.

This was my favorite exchange.  It's both funny and really rings true.  I can see Mimi and Eric (even though he grew up in Jericho) as the city-fied fishes out of water a lot of the time.

Quote:

"We can...we know paperwork, systems," she said. "We know out lattes from our cappuccinos." She raised her eyebrows at him.

He nodded, smiling. "We can use chopsticks. That's a skill to take to the bank."

Mimi giggled. "You can use them? I thought I was the only one who ate sushi in this place."

He shook his head. "Picked up a thing or two at the place near campus. But you're right, the Chinese food place in Fielding has forks."

She laughed again. "That must be the place Stanley tells me he used to get 'Moo Goo Guy in a pan.'"

Eric nodded. "Must be the one."

"I don't think he can use chopsticks, but he'd say why would you need them, if you have a fork anyway," Mimi continued. "Can Mary use them?"

"Mary thinks she can use chopsticks," shrugged Eric. At Mimi's questioning look, he shrugged again. "She drops half of what she picks up."

"Stanley's never seen a mango."

"Mary's never been on a subway." They both chuckled.

Nice job!  Thanks for taking this challenge and doing such interesting, wonderful (and I must admit, unexpected) things with it. :-)

 

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Author's Response:

Thanks Marzee!

You're very right, though I found this one hard to write, it actually turned out to be a very interesting pairing, and a much better dynamic then might develop between other absurd pairings of E's and M's.

Definitely Mimi has a change in perspective about Eric in this one, and he also views her in another light. As you know, this story underwent a lot of development and change, and was really my biggest challenge yet, but in the end, I really enjoyed getting into these characters and their experiences trapped in the tunnel, so I will thank you for this suggestion.

Thanks for reading and commenting!