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Oh, Marzee, what a treat it was to read this chapter! I liked how you balanced the levity of Jake and Heather going to Buffalo to meet the family with the seriousness of the situation in which they find themselves in the present.
One of the things that I think you do so well is describe the character's expression, tone, and movements. Your words really do bring the story to life for me as I read.
The small touches you add also make your story so special. For instance, the Rapunzel reference, the vetting process for 'Cowboy' Jake, the thrifty comment, and the debate on what qualifies as supplemental food (which intrigues the political scientist in me).
I've been really curious to see how you would handle the "Marines" coming to Jericho, so I'm very excited to read more. And, of course, I can hardly wait for Jake to meet the rest of Heather's family.
Great job!
Nice chapter, Marzee, and I was glad to see another installment of the DC series posted! And the beginnings of an alternate version of another episode :)
Semper Fidelis was never my favourite episode to begin with, but I think it grew on me over time, and one aspect I liked was that it had some of the energy of the group scenes we didn't get as much of in the two episodes before it. You've got that here in the opening, I think, with the town struggling through meetings, and then gathered outside to see what they can of this new development in town. I could feel the rock-and-hard-place anxiety of the people trying to find the best way to stretch impossible rations for everyone, and appreciated the different opinions we got on the subject, and I could feel the excitement of the onlookers feeling that at last, someone was offering a way out of the certain starvation that seems looming ahead.
I liked the addition of the town council members, it was good to hear from them, as well as Stanley's interjections (thank you for making him an important voice for an important segment of the population) and also Roger. Roger was a character who I always found rather interesting, with his arc, and sympathetic, but he appeared for such a short time, really, I don't always think of him, so it was interesting to read of him again here. I could see his passionate defense of his 'people' beginning to grow.
I enjoyed the back-in-the-day scenes as well. Jake and Heather adjusting to their new status as an engaged couple, coping with the limelight on the plane, was quite amusing, and of course, sweet. I of course, loved the Mikey scenes we got here. I imagine Mikey will be somewhat easier to win over for Jake than the older brothers, and he's gotten off to a good start, helping him out with parking and gas money. I also really liked the little glimpse we got of Tommy's work, and it was too funny how Heather and Jake managed to tune in just in time to hear their good news being broadcast all over Buffalo, as well as to hear the foreboding plans the brothers Lisinski may have in store for their sister's cowboy. Something tells me Jake might want to watch out, but I'm sure he can handle whatever they've got planned.
I also liked the ice fishing detail, Ridley's group's description (and that they're staying! I couldn't remember if they left before the Marines showed up in the original or not) and the introduction of Maggie (another character who grew on me). Great chapter, and I look forward to the next !